2015年托福考试独立性写作例文
一篇作文的题目翻译成“命题”更加切题，同样一个命题，在不同的考生眼里可以develop 出不同的 thesis statement ( 中心论点)，每一篇托福独立性写作必须有一个中心论点，而且只有一个中心论点。通常，一篇独立性写作的`中心论点分解成三个分论点：general idea (分论点)，由三个段落去论述;在段落中，分论点的称呼是 topic sentence (主题句);这三个包含有主题句的段落合称为 body (正文)。正文中的三个分论点又由另外一个重要的作文要素 supporting details ( 支撑细节)去阐述。这便是托福独立性写作的核心三要素：中心论点，分论点和支撑细节。
◎ 以下是用 outline (大纲)的“作文”方法来展示上面这道作文题目的三个写作核心要素：
Thesis statement ( 中心论点)：I learned a lot in introduction to ART History, and it was inspiring.
正文段 1 Topic sentence Art history teaches you about more than art.
Supporting details History, religion, literature, mythology
‚ I didn’t learn these things in my engineering classes.
正文段 2 Topic sentence I had a very good teacher.
Supporting details Experienced and well known
‚ Enthusiastic and inspiring
正文段 3 Topic sentence I learned about the history of engineering.
Supporting details Buildings and bridges
‚ City planning
◎ 以下是一篇根据上面题目解析过程而写成的高分范文，供参考。
Even though I am an engineer, I have to say that introduction to Art History is the most important class I have ever taken. In this class I had the opportunity to learn new things, not only about art, but about other areas as well. I had a teacher who inspired me. And, believe it or not, it was important to my career as an engineer.
The course not only had interesting content but also a very inspiring teacher. My art history professor had a lot of enthusiasm for her subject, and she was able to convey that enthusiasm to her students. Even though I am in a different field, this professor was a sort of role model for me. It is always inspiring to see people who love their work, no matter what it is. As I pursue my career as an engineer, I often think of this professor and hope that I bring the same enthusiasm to my own work.
Art History should be a required course for everyone because it teachers you about so many things. I learned not only about art,but also about history, religion, literature, and mythology. These are subjects I didn’t learn about in my engineering classes, so it was a wonderful opportunity for me.
Studying art history taught me some things about the history of engineering. In old paintings, I saw how buildings and bridges were built in the past. I saw how cities were planned. I realized that I could learn about my own field in different ways.
I learned a lot of things in my art history class. I learned about art ,about engineering, and about other things I hadn’t imagined. Both the subject and the teacher inspired me to expand my mind. I an very glad that I took this class.
